WALT: Create a Legend using show not tell. I enjoyed doing this because I got to write my own Legend. Next time I will add more images.
Friday, 21 July 2017
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You have created a wonderful legend Amber. You used very descriptive writing and painted a great picture in my head. I like the pictures you created to go with your story. You are a great author and should be very proud of this!
ReplyDeleteHello Amber,
ReplyDeleteAwesome animation! I like some of the descriptive words you used. Also I like your story, it's really creative.
Awesome work!
Prudence,
Yaldhurst Model School
To Amber
ReplyDeleteHi Amber, I like your story, it's detailed and not to long. You should double check because in the last page you accidentally wrote of of. What inspired you to make this story?
Love Mika
Yaldhurst Model School
Hi Amber, my name is Parwin and I think the Legend that you have made is amazing! How did you come up with the idea's? Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School and I like this post because it shows the story with a animation. How long did it take you to do this?
ReplyDeleteHi I am Gracie from yaldhurst model school. Awesome animation!. Its really creative story! You have created wonderful legend of the rainbow. From Gracie
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Blake from yms school I like your story about the rainbow legend I really like how you designed the whale next time try to do spelling corrections.
ReplyDeleteHi Rheanna,
ReplyDeleteI thought your story was really good. I could follow the sequence of the story and you used descriptive words to make the story more interesting. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Hi Amber, my name is Alex and I'm a year 6 student from St. Bernadette's School. This is an amazing legend! The background and the images were amazing too! My favourite part of your story was the ending because the rainbow was colourful and you described the story with lots of detail. Next time maybe you could re-read your work because in slide 4 you put item 2 times. I look forward to seeing more writing from you Amber.
ReplyDeleteHi Amber it's Lauren,
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you used all the colours in the right order. Maybe next time you could not say gentle creature you could say the gentle Whale, but over all it was cute! I look forward to seeing more work by you, bye.
Hi Amber, I'm Zach a Year 5 from St Bernadette's School. I liked your story about the Rainbow. It was very creative. I think the vocabulary was great and very fitting. Did you think about how the Rainbow got to the land and how it duplicated into double and triple Rainbows. I think that your story is really creative.
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